Haruhi said flatly, thrusting the manuscript back.
"It's no goo~d?"
Asahina-san raised her voice to a near-scream,
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"Yup, no good. Totally. It doesn't strike any chords.""But I really, really thought about it......"
Learning back on the chief's desk, Haruhi took the pen that had been on her ear into her hand and continued,
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"But,""First, this introduction is too common. 'Long,long ago, in a certain place......' whatever, that's such a stale and ordinary way to start a story. Give it a little more twist. The beginning part should go for the catch, okay? First impressions are crucial."
Asahina-san nervously said,
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After making it a point to write "retake" over the copy paper of the manuscript with a red pen, she lightly tossed it into a cardboard box beside her desk. Within in the box that had been originally loaded with oranges now was a mountain of wastepaper she had decided to send to the incinerator."I thought that was how fairy tales are......"
"That mindset is obsolete!"
Haruhi handed on the rejection with a thoroughly self-important air."The transformation of ideas is necessary. If you remember hearing this or that some where, think about the opposite first. Then you might just give birth to something new."
This feeling like we were rapidly straying from the point was the result of Haruhi's thought system. It's not like the pick-off motion of a pitcher that let a fast runner get on first base, and I don't think it'll be good if you just do the opposite, either.
"Anyway, this is rejected."
"Write something new."
"Woo............"
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